题目：Technological progress has bought great changes to our society in the last 100 years. However, some people think that it has also brought some negative effects at the same time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this point?

        It’s inevitable that technology is more and more important as the society develops; just as inevitably (作文中一百字以内尽量不要用重复的字), the debate over the effect that technology brought is increasingly fierce（how can a debate be fierce）. Some people are convinced that the progress of technology cause some negative effects on human being. As for me, I side with this view.
        Technology is essential in a developing society, without it, no society could be as prosperous(注意用词，既然是developing society,何来prosperous) as it is nowadays; people could not enjoy the convenience that technology brought today. Whereas< formal used to say that although something is true of one thing, it is not true of another >, meanwhile(此单词可以删除，因为whereas已经有此意思) environment is contaminated（可以在此point上扩展，更详细地说明环境怎样污染，如：水，空气，土地等） seriously by technology（用by太直接了，可以讲成是the development of technology has somewhat made our environment contaminated， for example, as the emerge of kinds of factories, water turns black and air becomes unfresh ）, air quality is deteriorated, the rivers are poisoned(此词太夸张), and the earth is damaged（太夸张）, these all can be boiled down（请查询boil down 的用法及意思） to the exhausted gas from vehicles, poison liquid from factories and so on, which all emerge under technology development. What’s worse, technology cause an eco unbalance. Because in this age, a series of plants, which produce goods, consumed a handful（什么意思？） of earth, and even expand to the forests. Green plants are cut down, numerous animals fled out, thus some delicate species are extinct. Last but not least, as the technology improved, human also prolong their life span, it sees a population boom in this century, but gives the earth much more pressure to sustain.
        However, we should admit that our society still needs to spare no effort to develop technology. It’s technology that stimulates the evolution of human society, that’s why we can’t give it up. On the other hand, we can envisage the future when technology can evolve well enough to solve much of the problem that it causes nowadays.

教师点评：

        学生可能背过一些单词，但具体用法及英文解释请多参照大字典的英文解释及其例句。另外，在论点与扩展的思路上可以更逻辑一些。文中您的论点基本上都是关于环境的，建议您下次可以像我上次讲的那样列出论点框架，如上述题目的论点可以是：
         1.    technological progress led us enter into an industry age, while on the other hand, waste products from industry that are harmful to people, animals, or the environment· 
         2.    it riches people’s life: now we have more entertainments – computer, movie etc., In this case communication between families and friends lesser.
         3.people turns to send an email or call their friends rather than writing a letter, more than that, we always note things down by computder and we almost never use a pen,  in this case, we’ll easily forget how a word is being written, and seldom of us can make a wonderful calligraphy(五星级词汇，请查阅字典)  单词是可多背，但请注意用得其所。
         学生可以就以上论点重新写此作文，请注意段落及论点间的连接词的使用，如：in the first place, besides, moreover, etc. 结尾段请讲一些technology所带来的好处，并转折提示人们应注意它所产生的坏处，以及需要找到solution.

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